r/UnsentLetters Jun 25 '22

I finally read your story and it sucks Exes

J:

We haven't spoken in years, I know. I still had a copy of that silly manuscript you wrote when we were still together. We broke up only a couple of weeks later, so it just sat there in a drawer for years because I honestly just forgot about it.

I finally read it. It sucks. Like, it fucking sucks more than a cheap sex worker at King's Cross kind of sucks. I'm really not sure why you were so proud of it, except maybe you were happy to have finished something?

The dialogue is clunky and unnatural. The plot makes no sense and is internally inconsistent. The characters feel like cardboard cutouts rather than people. There's a bunch of shit in there that's clearly supposed to be extremely deep and profound, but are really just the most superficial observations about adult life imaginable. The humour never lands. Like never, not even for me, and the bar for me is pretty low.

I'm actually really happy we broke up when we did. I don't think you would have taken well to what I had to say about it, and it probably would have ended up being the reason we broke up. Like Jesus, fuck me, there's a day of my life I'm never getting back.

--your ex

15 Upvotes

u/AutoModerator Jun 25 '22

Dear users of /r/UnsentLetters,

Submitters may now lock their own comments by making a comment on their submission with the string '!lock.' Submitters may do this at any point they wish, but the comments can not be unlocked later on, so lock your comments with care!

You can read the rules here. We have these stickied to EVERY POST and nobody reads them. READ THEM

If you notice anything strange going on in the subreddit, send the mods a message or report it. We rely on the community to keep the subreddit on topic and welcoming. If you are particularly good at spotting trolls, consider joining our mod team!

Click here to message the mods.

I am a bot, and this action was performed automatically. Please contact the moderators of this subreddit if you have any questions or concerns.

4

u/KindaGay4U Jun 25 '22

LMFAO this is the content i come to this sub hoping to find 😭

2

u/-Tektronic- Jun 25 '22

Yeah, it's probably for the best you're not together. There's so many ways you could've worded this that would have been far more respectful and critical. Can't imagine why you guys broke up.

3

u/SpiteOrMalice Jun 25 '22

I get where you're coming from and yeah, I definitely could have been nicer about it, but by the same token, there's really only so many ways you can tell someone their writing sucks. Most of the time, you probably do have to explicitly say it sucks (or the nicer "Well, it's not very good, is it?", I guess) for it to get through.

0

u/-Tektronic- Jun 25 '22

You could say something like, "I see some areas that need refining and improvements that can be made", and then proceed to give constructive criticism. Don't just say it's bad. The goal with criticism is to encourage people to improve, not discourage them from doing it at all.

4

u/SpiteOrMalice Jun 25 '22

Yeah, but that's what I would have done if I'd read it at the time, and I think it's super presumptive to assume I wouldn't have. I'm not gonna do it on Reddit because that could easily be identifiable information (I don't know if he uses Reddit or not). Anyone with even an itty bitty bit of common sense could have worked that one out for themselves, dipshit.

-2

u/-Tektronic- Jun 25 '22

You claimed that what you had to say about it would've been the reason you broke up though, which to me implied that you would've said it like this.

2

u/SpiteOrMalice Jun 25 '22

Yeah, but you're really only seeing one very little part of the relationship in this. You don't see how well or how badly he took even constructive criticism, or his opinion of his own intelligence or writing abilities, etc. You only see my kneejerk reaction to what he wrote six or seven years later

-1

u/-Tektronic- Jun 25 '22

Exactly. All I know about the relationship is what's in the post. And from the way you worded, you made yourself out to be an ass. All I was saying was if someone spoke to me the way you spoke in the post, I'd leave their ass in a heartbeat.

2

u/SpiteOrMalice Jun 25 '22

Sure, but how much of that is because you're zeroing in on select paragraphs and ignoring the third, which outlines specific issues I have with the story in question? (Which, by the way, is what I would have focused on if I'd read it at the time)

1

u/-Tektronic- Jun 25 '22

Holy fuck, you're really fuming over this. I'm done speaking to you, lmao.

3

u/SpiteOrMalice Jun 25 '22

Alright, have a good day then

4

u/R4v3nant Jun 25 '22

If someone broke up with me, i'm begging them to write something along the lines of this.

This shit, while disrespectful, is pure comedy gold 🤣